土曜日, 5月 28, 2005

P.O.V. comparison

This is something I did to see how one event in the storyline could be told by three different points of view. Have a look.

Rhia layed back on the rock, hands settled behind her head. She could feel Kalvin's eyes on her, so tried her best to appear calm, despite the race for their life they'd just barely won. Romeo was watching her as well. He was always watching her. Protecting her, he said. He was more of a father towards her than even Jason had been.
"We should get going after a short rest," she said. "Shouldn't give the Hunters time to catch up." She was surprised at the calm in her voice, when her insides felt so much like jello.
"You get this all the time, don't you?" Kalvin's voice was filled with concern. Of course he wouldn't remember it. He was always supressed when she was in a state of fear, panic, or urgency.
"All the time, Kal." How could she tell him that each and every time felt as though it would be the last thing she ever experienced? No, she had to stay calm. This was no time to panic.
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Kalvin sank down against the tree he was leaning against. His legs ached from running, and his head from the lack of oxygen. He looked up to see Rhia lounging on a boulder a few feet from the treeline. How could she be so calm? Like she didn't have a care in the world; nevermind the fact that a pack of faceless, voiceless creatures had nearly killed them. The angel stood close-by, watching Rhia as well. He was always watching. What was it he could see that no one else could? What on earth drew him to Rhia the way it did?
"We should get going after a short rest," Rhia said. "Shouldn't give the Hunters time to catch up." She hardly seemed worried at all! Hunters, she called them. Already a nickname for them? Or...
"You get this all the time, don't you?" How is it he had no recollection of them? Was it these creatures that caused Rhia so much pain? He did remember coming back to her mind in times while she was recovering from strange or large quantities of injuries he didn't experience her getting.
"All the time, Kal," she said after a short pauce He looked to Romeo, but he hardly seemed surprised. Then it was true. His poor, dear Rhia.
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Romeo relaxed his wings, contemplating withdrawing them. He thought better of it, though. They'd just barely escaped the claws of death, his cruelest master. It was too soon to assume they were safe. He watched Rhia as she layed back on the boulder a few feet away. The angel was safe, but restless. He could see her fidgeting with Rhia's lasting fear. He was glad, though, that she was so calm on the outside.
"We should get going after a short rest," she said. "Shouldn't give the Hunters time to catch up." Her voice masked her fear well, doing quite a convincing job of it. So convincing that their 'newest' companion, Kalvin, seemed worried. He didn't understand her serenity. And who could blame someone who'd just consciously encountered the Hunters for the first time?
"You get this all the time, don't you?" the young man asked, his voice distinctly giving away his concern.
A short pause, and Rhia carefully replied, "All the time, Kal." It wasn't the answer Kalvin had wanted, but it was the truth. Romeo kept quiet, reserving himself to just keeping an eye on the angel he'd been created to protect.